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Almost Like Tears

April 20, 2012

This is the photo prompt from Madison Woods for the Friday Fictioneers’ 100-words.

http://madisonwoods.files.wordpress.com/2012/04/water-drips-off-rock2.jpg

Come up with a story, 100 words, more or less, based on the above picture.

Almost Like Tears

Nina felt the rain on her face and wondered when it would end this time.  She looked up, letting the cool drops slide down her cheeks, almost like tears. I have to tell him, she told herself as thunder cracked in the distance.

“Jason,” she began after dinner, “it’s not working.”

“I know,” he lamented. “I wanted to say something.”

“Oh?”

“I’m sorry.”

After he left, Nina went outside for a walk.  The street was quiet and clean from the rain, a good night for walking she told herself. And for walking out. She wanted to laugh. There’d be time.

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32 Comments leave one →
  1. April 20, 2012 2:13 am

    Almost like Tears is magical in its simplicity. It casts a spell over the reader, each word perfectly placed.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  2. April 20, 2012 2:59 am

    “The street was quiet and clean from the rain, a good night for walking she told herself. And for walking out”
    Sums it up perfectly. A slice of life beautifully presented. Good work!

    Parul
    http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/layla/

  3. April 20, 2012 4:27 am

    A painful interchange, but rendered bearable and almost optimistic by the language. Excellent.

    Mine’s at:http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/spellbound-friday-fictioneers-april-2012/

  4. April 20, 2012 4:44 am

    That was a little surprise. Tears of sadness turn to tears of gladness!
    Lindaura
    here is mine: http://fictionvictimtoo@blogspot.com

  5. April 20, 2012 5:19 am

    This is very real – you convey difficult and sad emotions with a real grace and elegance through the descriptions here. nicely done.

    I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/friday-fiction-maturity/

  6. April 20, 2012 5:54 am

    This is beautifully written, and with a perfect twist that changed Nina’s plans, at least for the time being.

    Here is mine: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/fridayfictioneers-diamond-tear-drops/

    • April 26, 2012 1:46 pm

      Thanks for the nice compliment. So glad you enjoyed it. Sorry I’ve taken soooo long to reply. I’ll be over to read yours as soon as I can.

  7. April 20, 2012 6:20 am

    love the last line.

  8. Lora Mitchell permalink
    April 20, 2012 7:19 am

    Love your title. You say so much in so few words. Nicely done. Here’s mine…(more tears…lol)
    http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

    • April 22, 2012 1:15 pm

      It’s probably the first time I didn’t struggle for days (weeks) for a title. Thanks for commenting.

  9. TheOthers1 permalink
    April 20, 2012 7:38 am

    Man, a relationship coming to an end. The rain wept in sympathy or joy? Great story.

    My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/water-the-earth/

    • April 22, 2012 1:17 pm

      I find rain to be a great backdrop. It can be taken so many different ways.Thanks for the compliment.

  10. April 20, 2012 8:34 am

    OH my god! I put in the stupid @ sign by mistake – and I did it everywhere!
    Yikes – so it was my fault!
    I am really here now!!

    Please find me: http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

    That’s what I get for doing this early in my English morning!
    Laura Lindaura

  11. April 20, 2012 11:09 am

    Mutual. Perhaps a friendship preserved.

    http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/

  12. Madison Woods permalink
    April 20, 2012 11:45 am

    I liked that, very simple and yet so full of feeling and impact.

  13. April 20, 2012 12:35 pm

    Love the use of water to imply renewal, a fresh start.

    Here’s mine:http://teschoenborn.com/2012/04/20/friday-fictioneer-5/

  14. April 20, 2012 2:00 pm

    The part about this one that really captured me was the “when would it end this time” (emphasis mine). Without that, it could be just about any other break-up story. With it, however, we know that she has history of leaving. We still don’t know whether Nina is always leaving Jason and then coming back later or if she is just in the habit of getting into relationships without being able to continue them for long. Very good.

    Here’s mine: http://wp.me/p24aJS-3Z

  15. April 20, 2012 6:31 pm

    Well done. Oddly enough, it made me wonder: where does Nina live? I want to know how often she contemplates ending the relationship 🙂
    At any rate, a well-told analogy between dreary weather and drip-worn relationships.

    Here’s my humorous story at: http://the-drabbler.com/splat/

  16. May 9, 2012 4:38 pm

    Thank you for stopping by.

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